I had to write a dissertation for my final project. I scored below average. So i have been given a chance to resubmit my draft. I need to make it more professional and perfect as per the instructor's comments below:
Here is the feedback on my project report.
This is an Automatic REFER due to key, required elements being missing &acirc;€“ namely:
1) The approved Terms of Reference are not in the Appendices
2) Professional Issues have not been covered
3) Evaluation is missing
Other questions I&acirc;€™m also asking are:
5) If you are claiming to be following SSM, then how were the different World Views derived? From interviews? Observation? It appears at present as if you have &acirc;€˜guessed&acirc;€™ what these views were. That is not good methodological practice and goes completely against the grain of SSM and other methods. Why pretend to be considering alternative viewpoints of stakeholder groups and not consult them? IF you have consulted them, then that must be stated more clearly in the Dissertation.
6) You mention the stakeholders involved on p.9, yet I see nothing of their direct involvement &acirc;€“ most of all in terms of evaluation of what you have done as your primary research. In fact there is no evaluation of your model; their views of your model; the project overall; your methods or self.
You need to step through this written work with your Supervisor and identify all areas for improvement &acirc;€“ most of all the missing elements above and then to ensure clarity in the remaining areas, OK?