We are a new tanning oil company and need to reword the description of our oil on the back of our bottle as it sounds stale/too 'basic'.
It currently says:
"My Gold's unique formula uses melanin-boosting, antioxidant rich ingredients to maximise your own natural tan, whilst nourishing and repairing your skin for the ultimate bronzed glow."
This is the only part of the bottle that describes why someone would need to use our oil/its benefits but we want it to sound way cooler and less mainstream/robotic? Just something fresh and original.
Some helpful info about our product:
Our bottle also reads - "Made & bottled in the the of Australia's iconic Whitsunday Islands, using 100% organic ingredients."
The oil is not a fake tan, it is similar to the likes of Bali Body or Reef Oil, where you need to lay in the sun. It is a higher quality oil than both of these other oils and any others in it's competitive market for the same price.
It has different ingredients that have different beneficial properties - the main 3 being:
- watermelon seed oil for increased melanin-production
- sea buckthorn oil for anti-inflammation (aka reduced sun-burning, which actually works)
- carrot infused sunflower oil for high antioxidant levels (which is good for reducing the effects of the sun and fights cancer forming free radicals produced during the tanning process)
All at their ideal ratios within the formula.
We have avoided all dangerous products.
We also have an SPF version which uses a mineral UV active - Zinc Oxide, which does not enter the bloodstream like chemical UV actives.
We will need an SPF blurb also to say something very similar. It currently says:
"My Gold's SPF formula combines melanin-boosting, antioxidant rich ingredients with the added benefit of UV protection. Maximise your own natural tan, while nourishing and repairing your skin for the ultimate bronzed glow." - very similar to the original oil's blurb
Future work is available for the right creative person!