Produce Radio Commercial/Jingle in Russian Language

Privet Russian people. I need a radio commercial produced in Russian language. Looking for a talented artist to make the commercial stand out. Listen to the attached mp3 file. This is my commercial that plays on a Russian FM radio station in New York. I need to improve (remake) it. You have 2 options. 1. Re-record with proper voice and attitude, and change the background music & effects. 2. Create a new text and record a new commercial. If you choose option 1: I don't like how the voice screams: Pochemu ni chego ne gotovo... It doesn't sound natural. It needs to sound more like a manager would be screaming at his workers... I don't like the music and effects in the background. If you choose option 2: The text should be improved to sound more classy, glamorous, extravagant, elegant, luxurious, etc.